Friday, October 7, 2011
Frank and the Cheese Problem
There once was a munchkin named Frank who lived in a castle called McCheesy's Cheesy Cheese Castle o' Cheesy Cheese. He was a nice man and he owned a cheese shop. There was a problem though, his cheese inventory was overloaded. There many mini fridges all over the castle over flowing with Mozzarella, Cheddar Jack, Muenster, American and every other cheese known to munchkin-kind.
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This has a humorous start; a reader can't help but to smile. As a hook, though, it ends a little abruptly. Consider how you might turn Frank's problem into something that a reader would want to see resolved. What can Frank do about getting rid of the extra cheese? How is this affecting his castle life? You have already pulled a reader in with the first few lines, but think about what you can write to make him keep reading.
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